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Spider lays intrigue...

Spider lays intrigue

( Another side of the spider tale )

There are those who tear down everything
like your house then promise a new estate.
But first the office block or shopping centre
what of your houses? shucks you’ll have to wait.

You can’t stop or hold progress back
with those who complain I’ll have no truck
There are things you need that you’re now getting
like them or not I’ll still make my buck.

I’d give you a job if you cost less than the rest
what do you mean I pay slaves wages
Don’t you see us CEO'S know best
I’ve been riding the gravy train for ages.

Politicians are among our fellow travellers
we must have the laws that grease the deal
No you can’t board or be one of the revellers
we’ve all swore an oath to the Masonic seal.

So what of your plight I say please worry not
you and the likes of you we’ll take care of soon
Then you’ll be a memory that is soon forgot
just let me look among you a there he is, a goon.

See the goon has no allegiance to any other man
he will only side or act if paid by pound or dollar
The fact of life my friend is I’m the man who can
pay the goon his wages to kill or keep you in squalor.

So to end I say, you annoy me no more than a fly
and don’t you know fly’s the goon will surely swat
So just you listen up and please don’t start to cry
or I’ll pay the goon or government to have you not.

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Thank you Rosi, they would never survive in a coucil house. Listening to the radio and watching tv really gets me so angry. There seem to be those who live in another world of endless high living, then an advert asks you to give for the dying people of Africa. the extremes are immense, sorry i'm ranting again. thank you . love Roscoe..

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

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I guess after a point wealth must just become a game because how much money can any one person possibly use? I enjoyed reading this but since I'm not posting at the moment I have time to throw out some ideas( don't moan too loudly lol)
s-1,l-2 change a whole to you a new
s-2,l-1 swap back and progress
......l-2 change with to of
......l-4 change a to my
s-3,l-3 change business men to CEOs
......l-4 try........riding the gravy train.........
s-4,l-1 delete also
......l-2 change sweeten to grease
......l-3 ....can't board with the other revellers
s-6,l-1 delete other
.......l-3 delete my friend
......l-4 delete his wages
last line try government/goons
as always feel free to use or not as you see fit.........................stan

Thank you Stan, i like some of your changes and will come back on the weekend when i have more time. Regards Roscoe...

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

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As promised Stan i have made some of the changes you suggested, thank you for your input. Regards Roscoe..

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

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I have one complaint. You can't do it alone.

We do it, all of us not fooled by corporatism.

Otherwise a fine write.

cheers,
Jess
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Thank you for your comments, but for the sake of our own kind we must never stop trying. Regards Roscoe...

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

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