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Sharing the Night

Submitted by Seren1 on Sat, 2011-10-15 10:34

A luminous glow
lights up the night
bedazzled I swoon
this midnight delight

ghosts of the timber
are grey in the dark
until the silence splits
with a victimized bark

shadows duck shade
and dance on thin air,
malcontents shudder
as feet jag a snare

beautiful cannot
describe what I see,
a garden of Eden
has been set free

the light coming down
our tide- orb above,
cast all in magic
its night-time I love

hope on a cloud
faith in the heart
never separating
or tearing us apart

I look to the moon
with space to spare,
goose bumps arrive
I needed to share

Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
I couldnt sleep and looked outside ... I can only say ... poetry in motion .... Thanks Eph for the suggestions ... as you can see I used them all :) lol
Editing stage: 
Editing - draft

Comments

lou

Sat, 2011-10-15 20:03

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love it all especially stanza 3

Lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

Candlewitch

Sun, 2011-10-16 09:25

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every word is perfection! I love and admire how your mind works. You weave a spell that no one else can do. Your style is all your own.

hope on a cloud
faith in the heart
never separating
or tearing us apart

I look to the moon
with space to spare,
goose bumps arrive
I needed to share

Love, Cat

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Natural_Mystic

Tue, 2011-10-18 06:33

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Enjoyed that poem it made me feel so at ease with the world around me thank you

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