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Seepage - Final writing with emotion poem
Makes me want to rip heads off.
Bullshit, verbal leakage
you are putrid seepage,
dripping down my brain.
Glacial sweat creeping down the back of my neck
trickling through my senses
feel the need to massacre ,
as I am , lying in this metaphorical gutter.
Tiny bites nip at my
self control. Testing my durability .
Laying me low.
The crux of it all.
Your are woven into every fibre.
Being without you devastating ,
Evaporating , driving me insane.
Lost amongst the fag butts and the debauchery
wallowing in my melancholy.
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Comments
Candlewitch
Fri, 2011-09-16 10:43
Dear Lou,
Most excellent work! Much better than mine, you silly girl! (and yours makes sense, too!)
always, Cat
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lou
Fri, 2011-09-16 12:31
Cat
thank you.
Aww don't tell me off , (bottom lip quiver) LOL!!
Lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
raj
Fri, 2011-09-16 14:53
Lou..
gut wrenching sensations emit out of your poem i believe just the way you wished to emote ....well done ..it is very effective...
raj (sublime_ocean)
lou
Sat, 2011-09-17 20:45
Chyrs
You are welcome
Your workshops are always well planned and fun.
Lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
lou
Thu, 2011-09-22 10:03
LOL!!
"You wouldn't like me when i'm angry ," as 'The Hulk,' would say LMAO!!
Lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!