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Our life’s journey
inevitable in death
like those gone before
in the match of human race
Walking a reflective curve
Pointing to the eventual end
that which awaits us all
the artist creates and paints
the poet writes his feelings
Time ticks on and on
it never loiters
Bury the pains of loss
to cover the distance in front
We must move on,

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... where is the sparrow? The subject of course is ancient, but this is tight and clean. My only suggestion is to reconsider "it waits for no one". Your subject matter being "cliche" you've set yourself a difficult task before you've begun, but though I saw nothing of the hackneyed in any other part of the poem, this line might be a bit too cliche to keep. "It never loiters" is what came to me, but it's just suggestion.
Otherwise a sharp, concise piece.

W. H. Snow

A poet is a nightingale, who sits in darkness and sings to cheer its own solitude with sweet sounds. Percy Bysshe Shelley

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the suggestion is noted and taken. I don't know much about what is written about sparrow. This piece came as a reaction to 'Sparrow' posted on the old neopoet screen sometime ago. Thank you for the comments and best wishes.


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