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Rippers...

Styx

The clock strikes midnight, the witching hour
Not three a.m. my usual time of power
On the prowl, before Killer and H. Stranger
Too late the victim knows... she is in danger
Shouldn't stroll deserted grounds at night
My blade sings the tune of her plight
Flashing silver in the moonlight cast
Terror filled eyes, life speeding past
Too soon she dies, from the slice of her throat
No time for pride... or to gloat
Victim number one out of the way
Off in search of number two, to end my play

Killer

Fog swirls around the lonely park
next to the river, deep and dark
The whisper of near silent feet
chase down the thudding heart that beats
A sigh, as the gleaming knife slides in
and from Killer, a grotesque grin
Splash... and spreading ripples go
wavelets lapping at his toes
Missing parts from thighs and back
go into Killer's shopping sack

Hooded Stranger

I lie here in the dark, clock chimes four a.m.
Waiting... patient, I hear screams again
Killer or Styx? I'll hear on the morning news
Three Rippers... I think two must lose
Styx is cunning, plans to the final breath
Killer is so random, just a lust for death
I don't use the dark to end sorry lives
Shadow of day, hooded cloak and twelve inch knives
Killer and Styx, in the limelight for my kills
Gotta have words; share the bloody spills

Three Rippers here, stalking the same prey
Need to agree, no room to betray
Each will have his own bloody patch
Three Rippers, not one, let the evil hatch

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Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
This work is the product of myself, and two other poets: Candlewitch and Hooded Stranger. It is very long, and so will be posted in four parts. I have been editor-in-chief, but have consulted with both of the others before making final decisions. We have worked on this for a number of weeks in our [spare] lol time. ~ Gee
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for the read and the exhuberant invitation to rent in Whitechapel. Maybe Killer will take a little vacation and go to London! He's told me many times that "Jack" is one of his heroes. Oh, to walk on hallowed ground! There are three more chapters to be posted. I hope they will be every bit as exciting for you as this one. As for "Sparrows", we think that they are one of God's best creatures. They are one of the most accomplished fliers in the avian-world! Killer likes to watch them perform their acrobatic flights and feeds them crumbs of his sandwiches. ~ Gee

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Gee,

thanks for being chief editor - you did a fine job my friend.

Was great working with you and Cat,

regards,

HS

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and it was my pleasure also. I have enjoyed this very much and maybe we should do it again. 2nd post tonight! ~ Gee

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Thanks for posting this and performing the act of editor. It was fun working with you and Hooded Stranger!

always, eddy (& cat)

When you fling poo, some of the stink sticks to you!

"The Book of Styx" can be ordered and purchased on line at:
http://eddystyx.mythramuse.com/

We have had great fun and are hoping that we will do some more work with you and Eddy. This work has given me some great experience in editing, and hopefully I will be able to put it to good use here at Neo. ~ Gee

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