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Ring any bells ?

Submitted by shazbat on Mon, 2011-09-19 18:16

When your boobs begin descending
When your bottoms getting bigger
When you put on extra weight
And you’ve lost your girlish figure
When you find a friend in chocolate
When you’d rather read a book
When you take off all your clothes
And nobody wants to look
When you get a water bottle
When your feet are always cold
When the night sweats come to haunt you
It’s a sign you’re getting old

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scribbler

Mon, 2011-09-19 22:53

Hi Shaz

You forgot to mention hair migrating or turning color then turning loose lol...........stan

raj

Mon, 2011-09-19 23:51

a good account of the

a good account of the symptoms of ageing...you could add a lil bit of contrast by mentioning about the "mind staying young"....

a nice read...brought on smiles...

raj (sublime_ocean)

shazbat

Sat, 2011-09-24 20:51

Hi Chrys, i wrote this to put

Hi Chrys, i wrote this to put in a birthday card for a friend of mine who's menopausal, it made her smile, so she said. I've fixed the typo (silly old me) thats what happens whn you don't wear your specs.

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infinite_dwarf

Sun, 2011-09-25 13:37

Jeez John

A hilarious account on aging. I agree with ChinaBlue, this has the potential to go on forever. Unfortunately, you don't have to be old for a lot of these things to take place.

Hooded Stranger

Sun, 2011-09-25 13:56

Shaz

Shaz,

superb in its simplicity...short, funny and well penned.

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