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Return to Me

Return to me the smiles
You took away

Return to me the tears
I shed anyway

And

Return to me if you must today,
The same way you did
When we made love last Saturday

Or return to my life
The same old way,
Else return all the love
Which I gave away

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Free verse
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I very much enjoyed reading this sad yet hopeful piece. Very well written.

Or return to my life
The same old way,
Else return all the love
I gave away.

always, Cat

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and
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is with you.

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Abit different style for you. I like this. You could try : When we made love last Saturday
and which I gave away and see if you like it............stan

Of seasoned players does count.
Stan,
Each poem of mine is
abs...
DIFFERENT

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my great unique poetic friend
who has a thought of her own
always...
keep it up
twill help

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you encourage me also thanks tc

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A fine poem.

What is happening with you?
Your poetry is leaping and bounding into quality.

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
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the sole source of my leaping,
sir thanks to u
i should have listened to u earlier.

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