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Religion's Failings..
Religion’s Failings
Relics relying on rhetorical ruses
THAT
Enslave elenchus elements
INTO
Living lateral lies
ABOUT
Insidious idols
GIVING
Glorification in gratuitous
TO
Intermodal internment
THEN
Oscillating oracular orders
RELEASE
Nudnik nonentities
CREATING
Slaphappy slanderers
Flatus falsely
BY
Anal antiquities
JOIN
Irritating irrelevance
WITH
Lording loudmouth lackeys
AND
Irksome institutions
SPREADING
Noachical nonsense
THROUGH
Gushy greedy goniatites
TO
Sad salivating simpletons
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words:
My true beliefs..
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Comments
Geezer
Mon, 2011-11-28 11:33
Boy!...
You're really down on religion, huh? Actually, This was ok, but I needed to stop and think about one of the connections between the vivid descriptions. Flatus falsely [BY] ? anal antiquities. Interesting mode of deliverence. ~ Gee
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Roscoe Lane
Fri, 2011-12-02 01:05
I just,
I just think the trouble caused in the name of a myth is unbeleivable, then you get preists ministers of whatever faiths pontificating about how good it all is.My aim was not to offend but to make people think. Regards Roscoe..
Roscoe Llane,
Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.
author commentthemoonman
Mon, 2011-11-28 13:33
But
how do you really feel (lol)
thanks for posting this piece !
Roscoe Lane
Fri, 2011-12-02 01:07
Sorry, it's,
Sorry it's as i say above to Geezer, thanks for reading and commenting. Regards Roscoe...
Roscoe Llane,
Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.
author commentweirdelf
Tue, 2011-11-29 05:49
This is my kind of work. Pull no punches,
stated eloquently and elegantly with a cleverly conceived structure that builds to an undeniable gestalt. great use of language.
Roll up your trousers boyo, it's time for the Weirdelf's Bee stamp [stamps both knees]
There! You are the bees knees.
cheers,
Jess
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Roscoe Lane
Fri, 2011-12-02 01:09
Duly done,
Duly done and thank you for such a cheery and warmhearted response, made my morning. Regards Roscoe..
Roscoe Llane,
Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.
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