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PATHOLOGICAL LIAR
When one lie leads to another
Becoming an intractable disease
Like a car without brakes
You don’t know how to stop
Mendaciousness increases
Mobile phones boost the rate
And provide a cheap way out
Trust lost because of cheap gains
They don’t know where to stop
Hearts sealed against conscience
Stealing and prostitution follow
This may lead to murder, because
They don’t know when to stop
You may put a snare for the naïve
You can swell amongst your ranks
The thief has nine days, they say
The tenth is the day of reckoning
When liars will have no where to hide
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Inspired by an article in an old manuscript, It reads:, AXIOMS OF PERFECTION, In the physical order – In the realization of the dream of beauty, In the moral order – In the realization of the dream of love, In the intellectual order – In the realization of dream of poetry, In the spiritual order – In the realization of the dream of the mystics
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t. reflexion
Mon, 2011-07-18 22:42
Yes...
i am a preacher man of some sort, but without a pulpit and without coded creed. Thank you for the Amen and in my way, I concur, 'So mote it be'. Best wishes.
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author commentGeezer
Mon, 2011-07-18 07:48
What is...
this notion, thieves have nine days? Then what? Never heard of it. Explain please. I did like the poem, and it does sound like a sermon. ~ Gee
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t. reflexion
Mon, 2011-07-18 23:08
nine days...
It is a saying here, 'A thief has nine days and the owner has one'. Meaning, the thief goes in stealing until s/he is caught. All thieves or any wrong doer that have been caught or found out, fall into this position. it means days of wrong doing are grouped into nine days and the owner has one. That one day is the tenth. It's origin is beyond my knowledge and may have deeper cultural, sociological or spiritual root. One sees wisdom in the saying, for example, the phone hacking saga currently going on in the UK and the fallout that follows. Best wishes.
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