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Paralytic Diaries - Booze Hound , Entry One and Two

Entry One

Went out on the lash with my drinking pals last night,
i found myself at the bottom a whiskey bottle once again 
lost the plot between lip and glass,
stumbled and fell on my arse.

Decided to search for my sobriety in a can of special brew
used to make me see things clearly,
could not see for the clouds within.
lurched and puked again.

Found my salvation in the arms of a buxom bar lady
woke to find i had my beer goggles on,
and by god she was a toothless hag.
topped up on Gin, she was Marilyn Monroe again.

Entry Two

Ripped open my eyelids this morning 
sunlight assaulted my eyes,
tearing at my retina.
Left me begging for my head to be severed. 

Death would not have me,
so I rolled out from my pitt ,
nearly went arse over tit.
My ex wife lay upon the carpet

Could have sworn I'd petted the dog 
last night curled up on the rug.
Must been the old dragon,
in a worse state then me.

Traversed my flat 
and looked in my bathroom mirror.
Mr Hyde stared right back,
eye bags down to my chin.

I swore for umpteenth time
I would quit,
I'd sup tea and nibble on digestives.

Took a gulp of my favourite mouth wash,
hair of the dog?
all was right again.

Yours Booze Hound

Booze Hound is a male Character I intend to write a series of poems about.

Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments

I have not had a sex change LMAO!!! and the poem is pure fiction.

Thanks

Lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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I love this side of you, Lou. lol. It makes quite an entertaining reading.

However, I wonder about all this *altered ego* writing, must be the opposite of *channeling*.

~A

Thankyou, I thought this would be a way using a different voice, and free me up.

Lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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you ventured out into an uncharted territory and came up with this write ...hard to believe it is fictitious cuz you pulled all the stops of a hard drinker...lol..i enjoyed reading this one...

raj (sublime_ocean)

Thank you

Lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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I'm pleased that you liked it, hopefully you will enjoy the next instalment, it's nice to use my sense of humour for a change, although within that there is a little darkness.

Lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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I'm catching myself up on your posts! You already know I love this character. He reminds me of Aqualung!!! (a song by Jethro Tull)

Love, Cat

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Cat I'm pleased you like Mr Booze Hound he is a loveable rogue LOL!!

I'd say he is a cross between in Dennis Hopper and Jack Nicholson LOL!,!

Lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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