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Never fuck with an elf

Never fuck with an elf
for we are subtle and quick to anger.
Wot?!
bloody lie!
We use subtlety if needs be,
as a means to any end.
we'll break dodo eggs to make our omelettes

You wonder why the dinosaurs died?
One farted in my general direction

The plagues of Egypt?
the pharoah dissed my poetry

The fall of the Roman empire?
Nero played badly

but if you really piss me off
I make it slow
lingering and painful
like the death of capitalism.

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no messing with an elf as the knomes do not like that:)

Jess your poetry is starting to tell your very own story now. I like that. How do I critique this, well too darn tired to check it out:) Funny stuff

Mona

they wish!

Glad to know you got an insight into the real me. Have you read "Flaneur"?

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falling down to my knees lol and psst my knome they are quiet tonite on the porch. (solar lights that is)

well you ain't getting it, it's a work in continual progress
La La to you too, my dear sparrow, yenti, friend and occasional conscience.

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Ian!!! Seven shades of shit?

That's a wonderful alliteration if ever I saw/smelled/heard/touched one. You practicing for the weird elf's new challenge? lol.

~A

sounds a little bit like one of my angry poems, but it gets all serious right at the end, i'm not dure that the last line fits, no offence meant, i'm you will put me right if i'm wrong.

Lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

do you think I expect to dish out the stuff I do and not get some back? Please speak freely at all times.

Yes, it does get serious at the end, bit of a cheap trick really, lead in with some jokes to soften up the reader then hit them with a necessary truth.

I'm not above cheap tricks, never have been.

I guess the real question is, does it work? Not entirely for every reader, as you found it incongruous. Some may have got a wee smile, some might stop, frown slightly and think about it (that's the one I want, but can't control). Some might think it's puerile liberal crap. No accounting.... [grins]

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You're getting to be like Moonman, throwing everything into your poem but the kitchen sink.

Me, I'd just like to have fucked an elf just once in my lifetime. Or maybe I did, and my life is the result.

;-)

I rather thought that the history of the world from the perspective of elven malice in 17 lines was a modest range. Presumably we have a somewhat different perspective to mortals.

oh, and you have mind and spirit fucked this elf, the physical is just another aspect, ecstatic, true, but so is the rest.

kisskiss

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Magic cracking up over here. THat line what a hoot and hannie. I got it though.

Your life is not of an elf Anna. More of a Goddess. Maybe a Goddess of the Elven World..smiles to you

sorry elf to barge in on your thing (think I owe you one anyway)

Anna is Goddess of Compassion, Engorged Parts and Slithery Bits

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due respect She Is.

f this and f that in here lately? What happened to proper English? Yikes another house is falling:)

flan and flaneury and fluff and fluffer nuffer said here.

I think that crude effing started all this
lmao

tootles for now..

more English than most English, coming from the Anglos-saxon, not French or Latin.

Grow up and drop the coy act, it is unbecoming of a woman of your age.

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lighten up, boyo!

Causes people to leave Neopoet? Crikey! I know you can't be serious, but am a having a little difficulty finding the humour without assuming you are mocking a mutual friend.

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It is okay Efee should I have expected a bed of roses answer? lmao

one
two
three

strikes you're out at the ole' ball game:)
ps crackerjacks:)

Makes me laugh

I grew up when you taught me how to write and share respect eh?

IF ONLY... you elfkins would'nt mess with me muse

toodles and a hoot in annie's

Literary world of great poets name one that used that word in their profound writings. My age is young at 9 x 6 almost 3

Fucking Awesome!

Much Love,
Elizabeth

Elizabeth

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Friggin in the riggin... "

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some accept cursing whilst bridling at the scatological, others find that acceptable and fuck not so. Even Eph objects to cunt. So whose boundary is correct?

No rules, no masters.

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We're going to give meter a rest for a while and have a look at rhyme.

Coming soon to a screen near you,

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I don't know what to say about this. Definitely not what I think of when I hear "elf".
Sorry, I'm a biased Tolkiener. :D
But this is indeed a refreshing read. I still am disappointed though; I wish there was more depth to it.

No verse is free for the man who wants to do a good job. - TS Eliot

http://www.wsgeorge.com/

I like my poems to have impact and make a statement about my politics and the world. This one was more of a rant. Like you I think elves Tolkein and it shits me to tears when people refer to 'santas little helpers'.

Maybe I should leave out the last line or expand it more.
I appreciate your critique.

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Jess, Neopoet Directors
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please don't change the last lines of this piece! I think the late seriousness turning makes the piece brilliant.

To swear or not swear in poetry... I think it comes down to the call of the poet and the poem. There are no set rules except in certain styles, right?

always, Cat

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.I have observed,
all the fucks,
maximum come as comments
for this most honoured,
gifted poet here
and
all comments more than double up
as he is kind enough
to reply to each one of us,
something
all poets on this site
ought to emulate ..

WTFs am I saying?

"Fuck" is an English word that is considered vulgar. In its most literal meaning, it refers to the act of sexual intercourse. By extension it may be used to negatively characterize anything that can be dismissed, disdained, defiled, or destroyed and may also be used as an intensive.

"Fuck" =====
can often be used as a verb, adverb, adjective, imperative, interjection, and noun. It has various metaphorical meanings. To be "fucked" can mean to be cheated (e.g., "I got fucked by a scam artist"), or to be broken or ruined (e.g., "my computer is fucked") as well as to be sexually penetrated. As a noun, "a fuck" or "a fucker" may describe a contemptible person. "A fuck" may mean an act of copulation. The word can be used as an interjection, and its participle is sometimes used as a strong (not necessarily negative) emphatic. The verb to fuck may be used transitively or intransitively, and it appears in compounds, including fuck off, fuck you, fuck up, and fuck with. In less explicit usages (but still regarded as vulgar), fuck or fuck with can mean to mess around, or to deal with unfairly or harshly. In a phrase such as "don't give a fuck", the word is the equivalent of "damn", in the sense of something having little value. In "what the fuck?!", it serves merely as an intensive. If something is very abnormal or annoying, "this is fucked up!" may be used.

loved

Here's the best video on the usage of the word *fuck*. Enjoy!

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=6D7rWLzloOI

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