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Most Manly Ones
Most Males
Have more breadth
At their waste lines
Than length
Fully sea-able down below
Lovely take some help of trick photography
And
Become your desired one
Pawn....of sexology
And
A modern celebrity
We all love
And
Yet disown
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments
weirdelf
Thu, 2011-11-10 05:38
Have you ever considered learning a bit of prosodic craft?
Short lines do not a poem make.
Musicians need to learn to play their instruments.
Painters need to learn their craft.
I believe you could say a great deal more if you learned some basics of prosody (prosody- the study of poetic metre and of the art of versification, including rhyme, stanzaic forms, and the quantity and stress of syllables)
Those tiny lines could be expanded into expansive thoughts.
Just a suggestion.
cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
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loved
Thu, 2011-11-10 11:08
Thanks I am
still learning
loved
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