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A MOMENT WITH YOU

We speak in a tongue
that none can understand
words that come from deep
which are only heard
by you and I

A spark happens
and a glow
begins to grow
slowly simmering
in the fire of our love.

The distance in this moment
does not exist
we are bound by electricity
that travels through
time and space

I feel you
as if you are here
right next to me
I can smell and touch
your beautiful skin

Every receptor of my body
has a memory
on how you feel
My lips, tongue, and skin,
down to my finger tips

The ecstasy travels from you to me,
then from me to you.
creating a vortex
where pleasure travels
Connecting us to everything.

Yet it feels like there’s
no one else
just you and I in the world
the universe belongs
to only us

I know at times
it feels as if this is all we have
but then I think, two people
can’t feel this way
without something else

A connection created long ago
which was born out there
in the vast universe
that has lead us to this moment
which will never let us go.

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
Hey Neopoet, soon I will be fully back, maybe another week and a half. Here's a little something i wrote my Jonette.
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Comments

I think this is a beautiful romantic problem, which I wouldn't dream of suggesting things to make it better.
I love it the way it is, written from the heart,
Tim

thank you,
Eddie

LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE

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......just you and I in the world
.............................................the universe belongs
........................................................ ......................to only us

loved

Thanks sweetie
Eddie

LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE

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hotty ...for ur sweetie poety.................
glad ur back with ur initial snap
i nearly thought u were a nice lady..... lately...

loved

hahaha! that was a picture of my "Joli" who you see in this avatar in my arms.

LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE

author comment

It come from deep inside, and i love to express how I feel. poetry is the perfect venue for me.
Thanks,
Eddie

LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE

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Very nice here this lovely poetic write of yours. Just one wee trip up in this line

too only us

(to only us)

sounds like a love made from the universe in one electrifying jolt:) Good job and happy for you New York Eddie

Blessings to both of you
Mona
xoxo

Thank you,
I've made the correction.

Eddie

LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE

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Nice to know a man can write with such feeling when it comes to love.

Lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

dear friend, It's how I feel. Being a man should not mean that I hide what I know I feel in the moment of when I am writing. I am not afraid, because i know for sure who I am.
Thanks sweetie,
Eddie

LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE

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