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Mockery
Pale copy duplicated
Echo of words already spoken
Thin gruel
Praise caught in someone else's
applause
Sallow reflection
Similarity but no direction
A rejection
No substance
Cracked version of an original
fake, a sham
A mockery of viewers intelligence
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Region & Country
West London
Favorite Poets
Pablo Neruda, Jack Kerouac, Alan Ginsberg, D.H Lawrence, Jim Morrison's lyrics
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Roscoe Lane
Sun, 2011-08-07 00:01
Sounds like,
Sounds like our government, cracked version of an original fake, Intresting to see these lines put to poetry. I like it. Regards Roscoe...
Roscoe Llane,
Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.
lou
Sun, 2011-08-07 00:07
Roscoe
Thank you.
Lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
author commentCandlewitch
Thu, 2011-08-11 12:07
Dear Lou,
I agree with Roscoe. A good write on a gloomy subject.
always, cat
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When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.
lou
Thu, 2011-08-11 13:24
Cat
Thank you
Lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
author commentEduardo Cruz
Fri, 2011-08-12 19:39
lou
pligerism is a terrible thing. I see it offen. it can never be as good as the real thing. because the feeling can not be duplicated.
very good write buddy.
Eddie
LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE
lou
Sat, 2011-08-13 04:56
Eddie
you understood this poem perfectly.
love lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
author commentlou
Sat, 2011-08-13 12:00
Xena
Thank you,
glad that you agree, I try to be original.
Lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
author commentlou
Sat, 2011-08-13 12:27
Yes
You are right, not always an acceptable thing in some peoples' view.
Lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
author commentHooded Stranger
Sat, 2011-08-13 12:15
Lou
Lou,
has someone plagarised your work?...or is this just a theme?
I liked each stanza...the message was clear.
Particularly liked this line:
Praise caught in someone else's
applause.
I have been accused of plagarism...obvioulsy not true, but to be accused of it makes you feel totally sick...especially when you have to defend and prove your work is original when you have done nothing wrong. The accuser is allowed to make a false statement and then run away...she knows who she is and I await her return!
regards,
HS (not bitter at all!! LOL!)
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With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth, yet nobody sees me.
lou
Sat, 2011-08-13 12:24
Dan
This poem is not based on personal experience.
I know that it is horrible to be wrongly acused, and I'm sure you will be vindicated.
Lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
author commentHooded Stranger
Sat, 2011-08-13 12:30
Lou
Lou,
yes I have been vindicated, but the wound is raw and has left me with a bitter taste in my mouth.
Glad your poem is not based on personal experience,
HS
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lou
Sat, 2011-08-13 13:08
Dan
It is bound to take time to get over something like that, but the person who accused you will get what they deserve, don't usually use this word, but in this case karma will have it's way.
Lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
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