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A MEASURE OF WISDOM

From the twelfth to the fourteenth tome
Kings chronicled their might and powers
Where a great ruler made a solemn request
For knowledge and wisdom above all else
To regulate fairly over all his subjects

In league with Hiram’s adroit workmen
Bequeathed a temple legacy to the craft
With treasures buried under the stones
Men went in search of a hush-hush grail
That remains elusive to the mundane

With a sword sharpened to divide
The infantile life and the departed one
A mother’s compassion led him aright
Common sense made famous by votes
That marks him the wisest bloke of all

This profound measure in judgment
A tip of the iceberg for the sea farers
If one wife is a handful of daring feat
Compare three and seven hundred consorts
And see the wisdom in human management

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But you ned to write poems accessible to others.

Let us help you. You do not participate in the workshops and you seldom give feedback to others.

Be brave. Criticise others.

cheers,
Jess
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