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Love Is...

Submitted by Candlewitch on Fri, 2011-07-22 10:59

Love Is...

love is a mongrel mutt
that strips the meat from the bone
a rainy monsoon season that
leaves your garden unsown

love is a bastard child
a scandal of reputation defamed
born in a moment of lust,
an embarrassment unclaimed

Love is that bittersweet feeling
that empty cavernous ache
that fills your entire being
with memories of a fatal mistake

Review Request (Intensity):

I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Review Request (Direction):

What did you think of my title?

How was my language use?

What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?

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Last few words:

This poem will be in the book of poetry I am writing titled: Mirror/rorriM. By caitlin Mattison.

Editing stage:

Editing - rough draft

Comments

Nilmini

Fri, 2011-07-22 11:42

Oh wow....

It is the RAW TRUTH!

We use to say and think nice things about love.... but this the truth that's experienced by the majority. I wish I could write something like this, too.

~ Cheers

Candlewitch

Sun, 2011-07-24 10:03