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look me in the eye

i guess
i'm never gonna sleep tonight
never gonna get it right
lost me in the sound of my only escape

and the
bass is getting louder
treble take me higher
singing myself wings maybe i'll fly away

and i'd beg
for someone to follow
would my life get any easier?
no i'll never be like her
but how?
they said just talk it out
how do you expect our ways to change
when he can't even look at me

i guess
he's never gonna get it out
never even let me in
lost me in the sound of our every day

it couldn't have been wronger
couldn't last longer
every time i say it
i know he wouldn't change


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Do you have a melody for this? I have three places in my epic where characters sing and I had the temerity to produce melodies for the songs. One of them is even pretty good.
"... it couldn't have been wronger." is superb. Don't let anyone tell you otherwise. I have always enjoyed nonce words and a healthy abuse of terms for our poetry. This is perfect.
Please don't let me miss the revisions on this.

W. H. Snow

A poet is a nightingale, who sits in darkness and sings to cheer its own solitude with sweet sounds. Percy Bysshe Shelley

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