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A Long Love Poem

I like you girl;
better'n chicken,
better'n liking myself I reckon

more than any other thing alive;
more than life passing,
or the promise of time

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Loved the brevity of the piece and the bathos of the title!
A simple expression from a complex man - as is reflected in the last three lines!! Cowboys don't cry, they just tell it like it is! ;)
cheers
Boni

Bonitaj

not so complex, at least my kids don't think so!

ahhh, that's another story

thanks

Richard

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Thank you for the poem Richard and thank you for the perfect comment Boni, much enjoyed both.

~A

a tip of the brim to ya

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Just a strange glitch happening.
On my screen
I like you girl
reads as
I like you girt

very weird, if it happens on other things you might want to check for code in your post. Remember always post from a .txt file is best or maybe you put in ; instad of a comma. Makes a big difference.[chuckles]

cheers,
Jess
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When I read this, you had me looking hard to see if I'd misspelled,
and it does look funny .... thanks Jess

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thanks, it was a bit long (lol)

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Sounds a little like a red neck love poem LOL !!

Seriously, I liked the fact it was straight to the point, also it made me smile.

Lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

we all need some lovin

thanks Lou

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you can replace trucks and dogs.
[you know I'm just being a smartass, love the poem]

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

you give immortality to sex ,
I only simply profess

This is my brief
and belief,

Nothing beyond a girl...
never, ever
one should
Chicken
in front of her.....

loved

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