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LINGERING TEARS
Long suppressed tears
Heart weighty with sorrows
A heavy down pour
In torrential flow
A floating inland
Soaked to overflowing
Wet from inside
Like Lagos rain
Blocked water ways
In a collective wrong
Turned our city
Into an ocean
Tears in my eyes
Like raindrops
Rise to drown
My mortal form
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Inspired by an article in an old manuscript, It reads:, AXIOMS OF PERFECTION, In the physical order – In the realization of the dream of beauty, In the moral order – In the realization of the dream of love, In the intellectual order – In the realization of dream of poetry, In the spiritual order – In the realization of the dream of the mystics
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weirdelf
Wed, 2011-08-31 13:43
Now this I get!
Both metaphor and allegory.
cheers,
Jess
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