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THE KITE
I soared in the wind
Rose above the trees
I could have gone farther
Into space far up
To the stars and the sun
But the cord won’t let me go
It was only a wish
I am bound to it
With a little boy at the end
The boy understood my desires
Helpless though
He let go the string
But that which I thought
Tied me down
Was in truth
Holding me up
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Inspired by an article in an old manuscript, It reads:, AXIOMS OF PERFECTION, In the physical order – In the realization of the dream of beauty, In the moral order – In the realization of the dream of love, In the intellectual order – In the realization of dream of poetry, In the spiritual order – In the realization of the dream of the mystics
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t. reflexion
Thu, 2011-08-04 19:27
Thank you
I have worked on the bits. Your interpretation is full of insight and it leads me into a new direction. Best wishes.
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A rekindled faith - Dancing in the Light
author commentBreakinglogic
Fri, 2011-08-05 03:52
absolutely loved it.
absolutely loved it.
I wonder, could this be considered conceptual proliferation? Or maybe I haven't wrapped my head around it in the right manner.
☆ raffy
t. reflexion
Tue, 2011-08-09 13:41
Appreciation
I didn’t get what you mean by the concept of proliferation but this piece uses the will of the boy to fly embodied in the kite and the failure by the release of the string. Simple, it may seem, but a deeper reflection on the subject opens fresh insight. Thank you. Best wishes.
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A rekindled faith - Dancing in the Light
author commentt. reflexion
Tue, 2011-08-09 13:45
of metaphor...
Thank you, I am glad you like it. The kite is an extension of the boy. His feelings and thoughts come into play on one hand and a spiritual journey on the other as in Yenti’s insightful remarks. Best wishes.
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A rekindled faith - Dancing in the Light
author commentJanice Pearce
Fri, 2011-08-05 09:13
The Kite
What a wonderful poem, drew me right in loved it! Line 5, I would omit, just my thoughts here :)
t. reflexion
Tue, 2011-08-09 13:53
Hi Janice
Thanks, your remarks are appreciated and I am glad you like it. Lines 5 can be left out, I see what you mean, but its inclusion is an attempt to compliment the physical realm in line 4 by using stars – a relationship with human kind and a relationship with the sun – like the Egyptian Ra represents the Cosmic or the source of all things. May be this perspective is not clear in the body of the poem. Best wishes.
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A rekindled faith - Dancing in the Light
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