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A JOURNEY WITH JOB
Pondering on the scriptures story
Of a rich man reduced to poverty
The vicissitudes of life he suffered
The struggle to keep a sane life intact
His foes warned, touch not the anointed
His wealth returned and so increased
Men, like Job are around us today
Made gains, married and multiplied
The ill wind of fortune moved around
And abided in their homes for a while
Some regained, reaped the harvest high
Graves swallowed others with their debts
The ship wreck of merchants of Venice
Fire disasters in our township markets
Losses arising from economic melt down
Even the world wars in a global setting
Are cyclical rides on the waves of time
Up and down and up again, we all sail…
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Inspired by an article in an old manuscript, It reads:, AXIOMS OF PERFECTION, In the physical order – In the realization of the dream of beauty, In the moral order – In the realization of the dream of love, In the intellectual order – In the realization of dream of poetry, In the spiritual order – In the realization of the dream of the mystics
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t. reflexion
Fri, 2011-08-12 22:11
a film about Job
Yes, some people say his personality is more symbolic than the real existence and that there is Job in every man. What is your opinion on this? Thank you and best wishes.
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