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INDIGNANT JUDGMENT

Submitted by t. reflexion on Wed, 2011-12-07 22:56

The glamour for change
The face of uncertainty
The search for a messiah
Warranted by our sorry state
Tilted will of people in battle
With self-proclaimed patriots
Craving for glory and power
Phantom bubbles of leadership

First African American
Our erstwhile Goodluck
The people began to wonder
Insecurity and job lost
Loosing homes
Leading to occupy cities
Questions are many
Answers are few

Millions of living dead
Lined up unwillingly
To take turn in the graves
Change in constant mode
Stubborn stiffed necks demand
The head of an unwilling leader
And call for a replacement

Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Editing stage: 
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t. reflexion

Sun, 2011-12-11 20:27

t. reflexion's picture

I am glad you like it. part of our human nature is never satisfied with what it has and so look up for something new. Best wishes.

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