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I’m not Blind! Or Am I?

I am not colour blind
But blind,
And my hearts’
Not red,
I’m told it’s white
Red hot
That's how I live
So ever after,
happily

Let love be blind
But under the sheets
No lights are needed
Tis the warmth of the hearth
The breath
That we value most
You love me
And
I’d you toast

So is loves divinity
A gift of eternity
Where’s the need
Of others invasion,
When love and lust
Can be the very most
Satisfying equation

Ah! Cause of
A loveliest incision
As two merge
With one another
Arrives a younger

Yours must just rise
Then you will
Even if you
Really are blind
See love
With your third eye
Beneath the blinds
If you really have one

Style / type: 
Free verse
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Mate, this is fucking beautiful poetry.
Each word perfectly chosen and where it needs to be.

May I offer you bees knees stamp?

cheers,
Jess
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goes to you without any second thought
.Thanks

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but for the line breaks in the last bits. I have no idea how to rearrange them (and wouldn't expect you to), but I stumbled with them. Ah, free verse. It is a difficult concept. Otherwise a sharp work.
istan

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as free as loved
or better still,
ISTAN is
Thanks let it be
as it is

loved

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can I say, after those glowing endorsements?
Great work, Loved. ~ Gee

There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

much more
with your seasoned silence.
Thanks

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