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This garden was so well begun
fresh ground broken fine and deep
beneath a free and warming sun
after winter's dark cold sleep

Laid out with a studied eye
each seed planted in it's perfect row
fertilized beneath an azure sky
a few storms, and it began to grow

Each sprout came up green and strong
unmarred by either storm or pest
thinking nothing could go wrong
we decided it was time to rest

Our minds turned to another chore
(something always requires our toil)
Tasks revealed behind each opened door
while unwanted seeds hid in the soil

Too much time, too much neglect
allowed too many weeds to grow
now the garden's nearly wrecked
but hope remains there even so

Now it's time the weeds are smote
well past time to wield the hoe
whose blade is the free man's vote
to all weeds, it's time to go

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Title perfect, and the rest just follows on. Another sublime poem about a subject most can relate to. Regards Roscoe.

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

I am glad you liked this. I remember hearing that in order for evil to win, good men need do only nothing. Our quandry in U.S. is due to not enough good men being involved in political process thus allowing the weeds to run rampant..............stan

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Good spot.It doesn't matter how often I preview a poem something still slips by which most find obvious..........stan PS well, I guess I'll try to go to the well for another word which fits well lol

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