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Hello Soldier ..Blog Conversion unread one
You Sir, have downgraded me
By calling me a peach
But I beseech you
Most folks love to call me
An apple or a rose
As at supersonic speed,
Poetry I compose.
None the less,
As I love to eat a peach,
I shall have a bite
Out of your hand
As it, I do reach
Thanks my friend
We are at your beck and call,
You are a soldier,
A warrior after all…
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments
the_fool
Sun, 2011-12-11 04:53
awwww, how cute!
sorry, all joking aside now.
i love poetry that is inspired by true reaction. it makes the author more believable and understandable as it shows actual emotion. the quicker one pokes back the better. editing can be done later. fun stuff.
btw, was the rhyming supposed to be there or was it accidental? i saw it as inconsistent at first but sometimes it just works. it worked here either way.
loved
Thu, 2011-12-15 06:01
But ofcourse ,I am rhymeless
You inspire me
So I just posted one as
a poetry
since a comment,
i can't also post as a poem .
Hence ....
Thanks
loved
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