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Guess who? (for a bit of fun)

lets have some fun !!...

read thisand PM me with your answer about who you think this poem is about ....I will PM you back if your guess is right. or wrong and let you know the right answer if your guess is wrong..:) PLEASE do not write your answers in the form of comments on this page..so that others can have some fun too in this guessing game..lol..

Smartly uniformed in white
short, tall, rugged and trite
in rank and file these troops
stand guard day in and day out

Few wise ones lost on the road
others take on additional load
one that's fallen out of line,
a wise crack in this bee line

Some knock while others grind
some gleam while beaming a smile
together they rock on a wintry night
tapping on their pointed toes

In silence they keep on preying
on all meat that happens their way
come night, the front ranks get
a nibble on some juicy treats

In time they'll part their ways
others won't fill their ranks
the hollows in the rank and file
will weaken a charming smile

Those who'll brave the grind
each mile and stuttering stride
will lay guard but not their pride
when it'll be time to bid adieu...

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Okay Raj you got to give us some subtle tips on this. Is it a poet here or a person out there? Or better yet is it a person or a thing?

Got you now

tag me back:)

i'd say search me
its as it does u
you please

loved

rain or shine back to the grind

wink:)

I have PMed to you the answer..you were way off target...now don't clench your teeth and say "Oh! how i missed this simple answer"...lol...

good try though...

raj (sublime_ocean)

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i'm pm-ing my guess...

cheers
p

You hit bulls eye with the very first attempt..that's brilliant!..:)

cheers..

raj (sublime_ocean)

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cleverly written raj...

Thank you Pleiades...i am glad you liked it...

raj (sublime_ocean)

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I'll send the wrong answer

I have been disqualified won't be the first time Raj. Lmao. Good trying anyway.

Try another sometime get us guessing game

Love to you che bello
Mona

now share
as the problem has been resolved
and we all have been absolved

loved

Mr Raj

Please give us the honor of the winning word and give Ms P her prize.

Smile and kudos to Pleiades

Mona
xox

every one up here will try to seek out an answer from you...but i am confident you will not play spoil sport by spilling the beans...lol...

raj (sublime_ocean)

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mate...my lips are sealed SHUT

Good..stay tight lipped Pleiades..lol..

raj (sublime_ocean)

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Common Xena...since you agree its a lot of fun..have a dip ...there is nothing to lose in having fun..have your share of it too...i will help you guess your way to the right answer and then you will clench your teeth and say "Oops! how did i miss out on such a simple one"...lol...

cheers!

raj (sublime_ocean)

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I will also pm you my wrong answer, LOL!

always, cat

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And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.

i did get your guess..and you were right it was wrong but not too wrong in your approach..i can see you used the following clues to get somewhere close to the answer but not quite..lol

white
pointed
rows
rank and file

raj (sublime_ocean)

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Cat,

as you know I am not one to blow my own trumpet (LOL!)...but I got it first time!...and I have had to sign a declaration of secrecy from Raj, so I can't tell you the answer!

LOL!

HS

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thanks Dan for controlling your urge to spill out the beans and realizing that holding them back is double the fun to kid others...or even black mail them ..lol...

P.S. perhaps line 20 gave you confidence that you have hit the bulls eye...lol..

raj (sublime_ocean)

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I have the answer!

There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

i already PMed you back ...sorry your answer is not right...give it another try...i will certainly give a try to write something also on the darker side as urged by you..

Good luck and cheers!

raj (sublime_ocean)

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Even if it is not correct...lol...still love the poem!

Cheers,
Lori

i already confirmed to you that you are spot on and hit bullz eye with the very first attempt...hope you had fun.....

Congrats!!

raj (sublime_ocean)

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was it your birthday? i asked because you said you got a present.. as for the quiz i can only tell you that Judyanne PMed me the answer and she got it spot on ...but be honest and don't ask her..lol...

have fun..much love...

raj (sublime_ocean)

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xxxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

Judyanne i already confirmed via PM that you got it spot on...brilliant for a first attempt right....don't tell JayCee though...let her pull out more hair..lol...

much love..

raj (sublime_ocean)

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