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Fractured

Twisting, throttling and asphyxiating,
shredding, smashing , ricocheting off of walls.
rising then plummeting.

Slammed into pulp
burst like a ripe melon
smacked up against , collision

Haemorrhaging
clawing and raking of flesh
peeling back to expose nerve endings

Grating tissue and grey matter
violating
blood streaking across epidermis

Caustic fluid stripping eyeballs
crimson , point jabbed into bran stem
Wailing, caterwauling

Soaring in oblivion
non-existence
at peace

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Very gruesome! Sounds like one of my migraine headaches feels!

(I think you mean "brain" stem) and the last three lines are at odds with the rest of the poem making for ectreme contrast.

always, Cat

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lou

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There are so many thins to exolore..

cheers,
Jess
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Thank you

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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