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ECHOES
Echoes are the shadows of the past
Like ghost of lives in silent streets
In events and episodes of history
Which continue long after ending
Echoes are the wars we have fought
Like thousand lives in twin towers
Weeping in Afghanistan and Iraq
Terror begets terror in anti terrorism
Echoes of earthquakes and tsunamis
Washed in rising tons of sea water
Into the opened womb of the earth
Drowned lives in tolls of thousands
Echoes need not always be tragic
Silent noble works echo from antiquity
By the custodians of the sacred light
Who interceded for all our wrongs
Echoes are the refreshing faces
Of human existence, through time
For a better future, we wish and pray
Till we all abide with the eternal now
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Comments
raj
Sun, 2011-08-14 07:28
Good reflections on Echoes...
Good reflections on Echoes....
raj (sublime_ocean)
scribbler
Sun, 2011-08-14 08:07
hi
That first stanza is my favorite. Being a lover of rhyme I see places where I would have used it but that's just me and poem is very good as is..........stan