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Different Center

down
deep, deep down
where everything I was
revealed itself
in lightless squirm
beneath sick chaos turmoil
killing slowly
I crouched the coward's flinch
of terror as my death
struck at me once again

yet at the center of my fear
where soul and struggling flesh are
wrenched apart in final anguish
and life becomes a thing remembered
I found a stillness in the madness
a void foundation solid as slow mountains

for on oblivion's final edge
that place I know as well as breath
I found delight in agony
a joy as bright as star's white heart
perfection's jewel
scribed with bells of answer
in the center of my being
Siva
many-armed
dancing

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Thanks Eph.

Respectfully, Jim

"Laws and Rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" - Race-9togo

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Brilliant

joe

Glad that you enjoyed it

Respectfully, Jim

"Laws and Rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" - Race-9togo

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Praise inded!

Respectfully, Jim

"Laws and Rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" - Race-9togo

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i couldn't have expressed it better than friend Lonnie has done ..about how impressive this write is...i echo his comment word for word..

raj (sublime_ocean)

I am pleased that you enjoyed it so much!

Respectfully, Jim

"Laws and Rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" - Race-9togo

http://www.lulu.com/spotlight/Race_9togo

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You need not ever ask.
Your suggestion is a good one
I changed it

Thank you, glad that you enjoyed this one!

Respectfully, Jim

"Laws and Rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" - Race-9togo

http://www.lulu.com/spotlight/Race_9togo

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I very seldom feel envy, but do here.

True courage of poetic meaning.

You know I never bullshit.

cheers,
Jess
Neopoet Directors

when it comes from you, it means much to me.

Respectfully, Jim

"Laws and Rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" - Race-9togo

http://www.lulu.com/spotlight/Race_9togo

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