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Dhamphir

Begat from the loins of the damned
wrathful Sire from a nebulous and sinful grave.
Daughter of a virgin womb,
ravaged upon the funeral pyre.
Progeny of neither man nor beast.

Child of extraordinary power ,
Lithe an athlete and fighter
On the cruel streets of London town.
Dragged up and rejected ,no mercy found
A vagabond .

Culminating in a Woman of unfathomable beauty,
masking the lost innocence within.
Untouched by love or carnal knowledge.
Warrior, of self preservation , safe behind the barricades
built to her chagrin.

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The raw truth is:

This is one of your best pieces you have written in a long time. I was blown away by it!!!
Truly hard to pick favorite lines by here you go:

Child of extraordinary power ,
Lithe an athlete and fighter
On the cruel streets of London town.
Dragged up and rejected ,no mercy found
A vagabond .

I LOVE IT ALL!

love, Cat

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Thank you so much, really happy to know that you rate it so high.

Love Lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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