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THE CHANGELING- edited

THE CHANGLING

I begin to move robotic
In a misty haze, blue indigo
Toward the black of oblivion
Lead seeps heavy gray into my veins
And I cling to who I am
My soul hides in Memory’s warm embrace
As the poison filters through my brain
And for a brief eternity
I know what dying is

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Comments

Thanks, Rosinella. I will make changes. I will keep robotc ecause the adjective is unexpected and brngs attention to the concept.

Love

Joe

P.S. ur comments are always very helpful.

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