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Breaking down the 'Bet

the D is a soft T
the B is a soft P
the G a soft K
the J even softer
Z a soft S
V a soft F
H a soft W
(o, yes it is!)
making L, M and N
a triplet set of purity
R and X have
personalities all their own,
the vowels, of course,
are the stars of the show
(but sometimes Y
scabs for E,
don't tell him i said)
these tools educated
our art to
communicate
letting us
simple monkeys
reach out.

all in all, though,
this makes Q and C
the little black sheep
bastards
of alpha-
C is a noob
substitute teacher,
confusing small children,
with its silence
helping K,
not to mention
the whole act
of being S on occasion,
Q is just a
bargain-bin K with
a speech impediment
that usually
needs a crutch,
trying to pass itself
off as high-class.
hrumph!
is there a point
to this?
of course!
no grouping of
letters
can be complete
without a period .

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welcome to Neopoet, a very clever idea for a poem, but it is a bit too unconventional, as it doesn't really resemble a poem in the usual sense. I'm probably missing something and someone with more brains than me will probably point it out. I just found it a little complicated .

Having said all that I admire people who are willing to be original.

Lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

So glad to see you back with the artful dodging of the same old same old personified exteriorized
homogenized rarefied (ratified, stratified, strafed and chafed) and lo and behold! sanctified!
Let us provide a primer from A to Z. Nothing having and heaving, hawing, jamming and jawing more value.

Did I say that?

~A

Welcome to Neo Poet! An unusual and eyecatching poem.

(but sometimes Y
scabs for E,

always, Cat

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You intrigue me yourself. You have posted really clever, thoughtful things, but no good poetry.

I await with baited breath.

cheers,
Jess
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