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BLEEDING INTO DARK-- rewrite
From a black and unknown space
appeared a demon face
Bleeding silver gray into dark
Once Heavens favored one
Hurled into fire and ice
Far from God’s Kingdom
His Night to discover
Eve’s serpent slides salivating
Seductions of immortality
To Soul's oblivion
Fills the human heart wiith fear
In Death's stillness
From a black and unknown space
appeared a demon face
Bleeding silver gray into dark
And in his eyes I did see
A longing and a regret
Light of Heaven's burning embers
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Esker
Thu, 2011-07-14 23:56
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I remember the abyss
crawling on the ledge
feeling the stillness and power
at the gates
immensely powerful poem
Geremia
Fri, 2011-07-15 05:20
This one is just a poem
This one is just a poem,albeitt based on a rrue peception. I am glad you lked how ths perception was traslated into imagery.
joe
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