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The Beginnings of Goodbye

wandering through town
washed clean by the last deluge
sparkling black shimmered
and I found peace under a rock
in rows of corn

I drank water and broke bread
as two hundred miles
separate two half hearts
ever aching and reaching
for your touch

I miss you
as I'll love you

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Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Thanks Rosi and Ian and Judd x x
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back to a night I was broken-hearted, and walking around my little town, wondering what did I ever do to warrant such pain in my heart! My first love had broken up with me! I know it isn't what this one is about, but I was brought back to the pain. Good poem! " not all my emotions have to pleasurable to be good" ~ Geezer

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Hey! are you sober go places don't you when you get drunk :)

raj (sublime_ocean)

'as two hundred miles
separated two half hearts'
- imho 'separate' - present tense - would work better...

beautiful write jc
love and big hugs

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