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ART'S FAILINGS

I would sketch you with a stylus
your graceful curving lines
running through a new mowed field
bordered by blooming multiflora vines

Or maybe I should sculpt your form
in some type of classic pose
carved in clay or wood or stone
with the merest hint of clothes

Perhaps a water color painting
in impressionistic style
all pastel with blended edges
to best capture that fleeting smile

Maybe i could write a story
that begins with when we met
then reveals all our shared life
but such tale hasn't ended yet

I know a poem can't capture you
so should I even try
to put in verse the girl I see
through early morn's half opened eye?

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Structured: Western
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments

Hmm,

This sounds familiar... wonder where I saw it before, LOL! Just as good as the first reading. Love the sentiment and construct!

always, Cat

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There are a few things which drift from here to there and maybe back lol.Glad you dropped by.........again...........stan

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