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Antiquity
Antiquity
time unrelenting
personal passage
minutes movements
marked
Calendars...
pretty pictures
numbers of precision
pristine white pages
visual reminders...
Clocks...
ticking away measured lifetimes
bated, dated, bar-coded
scissors move to cut the threads...
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This poem is written for the book I am in the process of writing, titled: Mirror/rorriM under the name of C.M. Mattison.
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Northwestern Wisconsin USA
Favorite Poets
Edgar Allan Poe, William Blake, Bob Dylan, Tom Petty, Carlos Castaneda and many more.
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Bonitaj
Wed, 2011-08-03 15:00
Well done Cat!
There's such a level of maturity and professionalism displayed here, that it is difficult to espouse each and every good point! The layout, the development of the theme of time and our human need to attempt to hold onto it, "contain" it, by whatever artificial means possible. Strikingly good piece, finished with a resounding metaphorical climax!
Splendid!
Boni
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Candlewitch
Mon, 2011-08-08 12:16
Hi Boni,
I think that at some time in all our lives we will become to some degree obsessed with time. Thank you for reading and responding.
always, Cat
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author commentCandlewitch
Mon, 2011-08-08 12:18
Thanks, Rosi,
The concept of time... all consuming!
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author commentraj
Thu, 2011-08-04 15:01
Dear Cat..
i liked the way you have defined Antiquity..Calendars and Clocks...it shows how we perceive the same things differently..thanks for sharing...
much love..
raj (sublime_ocean)
Candlewitch
Mon, 2011-08-08 12:20
Thanks Raj,
I appreciate that you enjoyed this one! Thanks!
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author commentloved
Thu, 2011-08-04 19:10
THE SUN
The moon and earth's revolution
define
time and birth of mankind
u have done well
to show us the path
How ignorant were we
loved
Candlewitch
Mon, 2011-08-08 12:22
Dear Loved,
It's a good thing we had Sun and Moon worshipers!
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