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almost love at first sight

It was a strange turn of affairs
We had seen each other a few times
In the local pub
Spoken a couple of times
In the street
She was attractive
No, not attractive
Absolutely gorgeous
Way out of my league
So I thought,
She had taste
She had style
And, the body of a goddess
Then, out of a clear blue sky,
Actually it was night time,
She held my hand
Squeezed it gently
I turned
Looked into her eyes,
Suddenly I saw
And that was it
Pow!
I was
Smitten
Bewitched
Besotted
So,
It really was,
Very nearly,
Love at first sight

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Is this poetry?
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Comments

and when you step outside your boundaries it is fucking brilliant. Emotive and touching.

I bow to you,
a very fine piece.

cheers,
Jess, Neopoet Directors
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Well Jess, I never expected that, perhaps I should stop hiding behind humour.

I decided to write a book a little while ago, this is the opening couple of lines and the full meaning will not be apparent until the very end, that's if it ever gets finished. Anyway, I was listening to Andrew Motion (ex poet laureate) on the radio a few days ago and when he had finished the half hour of "Poetry" reading I thought what a load of shite. Usually what I write rhymes and scans (well it usually does) but I thought I'd post this with the question "is this poetry" I know I like the way it reads, but there is no rhyme or rhythm, so, is this poetry?

John

author comment

yes

cheers,
Jess, Neopoet Directors
Neopoet is a workshop. Poets take the time to read and think about your work and offer suggestions.
There is no obligation to make any changes however please acknowledge critique and comments.

Pow!
I was
Smitten
Bewitched
Besotted

all superlatives
add on
i was on
and oozing
and was i perspiring down below
heaven knows

imaginary fuckin pose

loved

but we don't want to get too explicit with this, after all my children might read it :)

author comment

but the children nowadays, know much more
and poetry is a freedom of expression,
at which I see ,you are more than adept

loved

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