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Summer Skin...

Summer dresses and flat shoes
Plunging bodices give great views
Hair unbound and flying free
That's what turns the head of me

T-shirts, shorts and bare thighs
Bring from me great heaving sighs
Been married tho, over twenty years
So I never get closer... get too near

I can't help it, I got to look
But wifey dear, only page in my book
I just look from back a ways
Summer skin makes for such pleasant days

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I guess that as long as we just look, we won't get in any trouble, so I'll keep changing my glasses as many times as I have to. LOL Thanks, ~ Gee

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Baloney, no woman in her right mind wears her hair down when it's hot.

;-)

~A

Aren't you going to allow me some poetic license? I do see women who wear their hair down, and especially on the beach. It is a cheap way to bleach your hair out! Thanks anyway, ~ Gee

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not only does it bleach my hair, but i am blond so it is not so bad! lol

for the read and comment. I know that when i go fishing or am out in the sun a lot, I like to let the sun bleach my hair too! I have blonde hair that is almost imperceptably going grey here and there, and it helps to hide that. LOL . Being an old hippie and a biker, I wear my hair long in a mullet. [What the hell has a mullet, got to do with long hair anyways?] ~ Thanks again, ~ Gee

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You letcherous male you lol!! A simple but very effective poem.

Lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

You got me. I started this poem about a week ago, and it was about one of the other taxi-drivers to start out, but I quickly realised that I shared his views. LOL After reading it to a couple of women, [including my wife], they said that contrary to popular belief, woman look at men other than their significant others too! I'm shocked! LOL. Thanks, ~ Gee

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I'm careful to never read aloud! love and higgest bugs, ~ Gee

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