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It ain't nothing but a chicken wingnormal poem of borrowed cliches with my sincere apologies.
It ain't nothing but a chicken wing
Scarce as hen's teeth
Too many cooks spoil the broth
Keep your nose to the grindstone
It’s all good
hot to trot
Keep it on the down low
love is blind
A necessary evil
the lesser of the two evils
All hands to the pump
Acid test
A mile a minute
Silence is golden
Free as a bird
like a seven year itch
I’m game
Rotten to the core
Knock it out of the park
Knock the cover off the ball
a rolling stone gathers no moss
Age before beauty
Fresh as a summer's rain
Deeper than the deepest ocean
Keep it on the down low
the icing on the cake
It's all good
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments
raj
Wed, 2011-06-29 14:38
Loved...
since you asked me to PM the list of cliches for the workshop i was going to make a list and send them to you...but i notice that you already got them lined up in this write in a pretty cool sequence....
raj (sublime_ocean)
loved
Thu, 2011-06-30 13:39
CAN U ALSO HELP DEAR RAJ
DO u see the depth....
in my poem
which others can't.....
its a sexy conotation of cliches so sequenced by me so as to convey through bespectacled eyes
loved
author commentlou
Wed, 2011-06-29 14:39
Loved
I commend you for using all of the cliches, but it isn't really poem, it's more of a list.
lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
loved
Wed, 2011-06-29 17:14
to all whom it may concern
Lou sent me a list,
all jumbled, to this …
I arranged them in a way of clichés
all cliches she gave…
my way as a poem!!!!! freestyle.... ITS ALL I KNOW..........
PLEAS DO Go
AND read the imagination
behind there…
each cliché has been REplaced by me…
I saw no other’s at least. The list I got was this.
ANY ONE CAN PLAGIARISE ....MY 5000POEMS HAVE BEEN SOME HAVE ACCEPTED SHEEPISHLY TOOOO
from LOU
It's all good
Keep it on the downlow
It ain't nothing but a chicken wing
Hot to trot
A mile a minute
To many cooks spoil the broth
Silence is golden
Free as a bird
Love is blind
A necessary evil
All hands to the pump
The lesser oftwo evils
Acid test
Scarce as hen's teeth
The icing on the cake
I'm game
Rotten to the core
A rolling stone gathers no moss
Like a seven year itch
Keep your nose to the grindstone
Knock it out of the park
Knock the cover off the ball
Age before beauty
Fresh as a summer's rain
Deeper than the deepest ocean
loved
author commentlou
Wed, 2011-06-29 17:29
Loved
I sent you the cliches thinking you new what was expected, as you must of found out about the workhop from its page. If you didn't know what was expected of you, why didnt you access the workshops page or ask Chrys.
Lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
loved
Wed, 2011-06-29 17:31
my regrets
i am removing the Workshp part from the title .
my mind can't use others words ..
i am a creator of original poetry .
MY EARNEST REGRETS TO ALL
whose time i have so wasted.
loved
author commentHooded Stranger
Thu, 2011-06-30 08:01
?
Loved,
the syllabus of the workshop was quite clear. the three simple tasks so far:
1. Come up with three cliches.
2. From the complete list of 20 something cliches entered, you had to write a poem with them all in.
3. Re-write the poem removing the cliches and using your own words.
Chrys worked hard on the syllabus and spent a lot of time running the workshop, leaving now is quite selfish, especially when the only issue was you didn't read the syllabus.
I think you should honour your committment when you joined the workshop to complete the course. You know the syllabus now, so go for it.
Walking away now lets Chrys down.
If you need any help re-writing your original poem, PM me and I will see what I can do to help, or ask any of the Mods, they are here to assist all participants.
regards,
HS
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With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth, yet nobody sees me.
loved
Thu, 2011-06-30 13:34
kindly guide so that i maintain
give me some guidance and hope
i joined the other worksop ...
not cliches one ,
but i won't like to let you down
i shall retry
if u guide.
None the less.... if you read through..MY cliche poem
it depicts two lovers making up ... on a park bench
which i have seen
with my own eyes
The poetic essence, perhaps may be lacking...
regards ...i mean no disrespect what so ever to any one
my regrets
loved
author commentKailashana2
Thu, 2011-06-30 08:21
Maybe I'm crazy, and you can
Maybe I'm crazy, and you can call me that, but.......however the cliches were worded in the list, and whether Loved changed the order or not, it's a freaking poem, if you read it as such.
Good un! It's so clever, most of us missed it. lol.
~A
lou
Thu, 2011-06-30 09:09
Anna
The way I see it if you don't want to do what is expected of you within the syllabus of a workshop, why bother joining a workshop. So it feel it quite rude not to bother to find out what is expected, or to just write what you feel like writing, regardless of the fact that Chyrs and everyone else is working hard.
Lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
Kailashana2
Thu, 2011-06-30 09:38
But you don't see the poem,
But you don't see the poem, Lou.... I see it... does it matter that it wasn't exactly as formulated by the workshop, even if in the arrangement, a poem doth Loved make?
Ok, maybe it's me and I see things others don't. call me crazy.
~A
lou
Thu, 2011-06-30 10:05
Anna
The fact that the list was rearranged, might appear to be a poem to you, but it is still just a list. Anyway I don't think we should prolong this discussion, I feel it is a bit disrespectful to Chyrs, to continue.
Lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
Kailashana2
Thu, 2011-06-30 13:57
Wow! ~A
Wow!
~A
loved
Thu, 2011-06-30 13:29
i shall retry
give me some guidance and hope
i joined the other worksop ...
not cliches one ,
but i won't like to let you down
i shall retry
if u guide.
loved
author commentKailashana2
Thu, 2011-06-30 14:00
Loved, at the risk of
Loved, at the risk of offending Chrys, I dare say, this was expert rearranging, whether or not it was *accidental* or on *purpose*. But do what you need/will.
It's all good, if we make it so.
~A
loved
Thu, 2011-06-30 17:11
it was NOT accidental it was
YES, TWAS WELL CRAFTED, COME AND SEE MY COMPUTER, I CREATE A POEM IN FIVE MINUTES …THIS TOOK ME SOME HOURS.
SAD THEY COULDN'T APPRECIATE IT,
IT’S A REAL EXHIBITION OF VOYEURISM
TO THE EXTREME,
BUT IN REALITY DAILY SEEN,
COME TO MY PARK
If YOU WANT TO WITNESS
SUCH RARE CREATIVITY
loved
author commentHooded Stranger
Thu, 2011-06-30 14:26
Loved
Loved,
your poem was excellent indeed, now we just need to work on one based around the original cliches but without using the cliches.
I am looking out now to all the Mods in the pool.
Ziggy(Enda)
Race_9togo(Jim)
Yenti(Ian)
Candlewitch(CAT)
Bonitaj(Boni)
can you all help out Loved here.?
She needs some support and support is what she deserves.
Come on Mods, time to switch on make this workshop a success for everybody.
kindest regards,
HS
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With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth, yet nobody sees me.
loved
Sun, 2011-07-03 09:08
i have given
sufficient thought hope some can read in between the lines tooo
loved
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