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UNGUIDED?
Blindly through our days we stumble
too often lacking guidance
or even basic information
upon which to lend ourselves direction.
Is it any wonder at all
how oft we fall?
But our natures being what they are,
each time we fall we arise
to again proceed toward....what?
Far too many times we lack even a goal.
How can it then come as a surprise
that we often seek what we despise?
So we bounce off walls of our decisions
to ricochet in new directions,
haphazard due to lack of plan.
But maybe not truly unguided.
For how often do we unseen precipice approach
yet, sightless, turn ere lip we broach?
Another venture into the unfamiliar
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Free verse
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Comments
scribbler
Tue, 2011-06-28 07:13
hi Ian
I guess if I were in cliche' workshop I would have said none plan to fail but often fail to plan lol.........stan
scribbler
Tue, 2011-06-28 20:21
Hi Lonnie
I expect we would all be amazed at how often we've approached some type precipice unknowingly and veered away at last moment..........................stan
loved
Tue, 2011-06-28 23:00
how i appreciate anti epics
i'm quite sure
you don't
but each such poem
i read and say
i will comment ,
bard or not heaven sent
would still be ,
my sincerest comment
loved
scribbler
Wed, 2011-06-29 22:39
Hi loved
Thank you for the time to read and comment.............stan
Barbara Writes
Wed, 2011-06-29 01:07
Scribbler
Wonderful reading this gem of poetry.
it is true in the lives of many that finding success is particularly impossible as they are unguided, either because they don't know the key to success, find the key, but the locks has been changed, or find the key to an dusty room of outdated knowledge.
persistence begets success if you don't give.
*Collaborative Poetry Workshop* American Version of Japanese Poetry ~ Renga ~ Haiku, Senyru, Tanka.
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scribbler
Wed, 2011-06-29 22:41
hello
Yes there are many who gain success late in life due to pure persistence............stan
vexations10
Wed, 2011-06-29 11:13
An unaimed arrow will always hit its mark
and your last lines of the first two verses really hit me, in a good way of course.
vexations
scribbler
Wed, 2011-06-29 22:42
Hi Vex
Yes there are many who just seem to stumble upon their goals lol............stan
scribbler
Thu, 2011-06-30 12:16
hi
Probably closer to being hanged for free verse that getting hang of lol. Thank you for taking the time to read and leave such kind comment................stan