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rain

i.

you drew clouds
under my feet
to break my fall

only light
this side
of creation

salmon skies
embraced
your tenderness

ii.

I heard
your heart
calling

only love
will show
the way

let us
reconcile
this passion

before
it turns
to rain

and earth
swallows
our tears

goodbye
goodbye
we meet again.

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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Thanks Raj.
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Comments

ahhhhhhhhhh,,,i loved these lines

salmon skies
embraced
your tenderness

raj (sublime_ocean)

Just wonderful the feeling and vision I got from this piece of work of yours. I meant to ask you before do you have a book out? If not get busy:)

Love Mona

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