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THREE FACES OF ADORATION

This land rooted in many aboriginal religions
Long before aliens came competing for devotees
Several aficionados hold onto their ways of life
At night, seek fortification from ancient deities
Then show up for supplication on sanctified days
Set aside by the invading majority, these fogies
Influenced our conducts, three faces of adoration

Some, neither here nor there, but belong to all
Like our nation, accentuating three main cliques
Where the minorities are swept under the carpet
Three consigns, three different settings, pointing
To the east, west and north see the budding south
But you are lucky to have these places to snooze
Well furnished rooms, just for your convenience

A private home where your kids rarely see you
Another where a phantom brother made available
And the one offered by a mysterious madam, all in
Locations laid out like rabbit holes for easy escape
To be wherever, then claim to be in one of them
You are a double-dater, the unfaithful consort
Unelected midwife, who kill babies before birth

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the place is Ota, three religions compete with intensity, Christianity, Islam and Traditional religion. The country promotes three main tribes, Hausa/Fulani, Yoruba and Ibo. A wife who has three places to sleep so she reports early at work. Underlying these postures, insincerity is a common factor. Thank you for the time, best wishes.

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A rekindled faith - Dancing in the Light

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for you have a listening ear, even when my English is not very good, or as Kalingstaros puts it 'forced' and 'infantile' yet you labour through them with an understanding heart. thank you.

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A rekindled faith - Dancing in the Light

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and thank you.

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A rekindled faith - Dancing in the Light

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