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The Fountain
When I think of you,
a flood of pleasures
flow gently
on rivers in my mind
The memories
we have made together
out last all other life's
which I have lived.
Everything else
is just faded dreams
dissipating like
morning mist on the bays
I live in the present
enjoying each moment
as treasures long searched
with no value outside
our secret realm
You have made me
young again
with just a word or
a simple tender touch
the look of your eyes
which said "I love you very much"
Awakened
is my heart once more
and I can hear the love
beating in yours
But yet, I can only
speak for myself.
I am filled
for I have taken the cup
and drank of you.
Where Ponce De Leon
Failed to find
"The fountain of youth"
I have found you.
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments
magics02
Sun, 2011-06-12 23:41
Splash
In the fountain.. got to say one thing and nothing more than this. Nice Eddie. Nice
I really like this part the best:
Where Ponce De Leon
Failed to find
"The fountain of youth"
I have found you.
Happy for you
Mona
xox
Eduardo Cruz
Mon, 2011-06-13 00:46
Mona
Thank you!
Yes, I am happy almost to bust!
"when you see it, don't waste time. grab it and hold it. scream out, I am in love!"
Eddie
PS. you know that this is sexual. It refers to a womans loveliness.
LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE
magics02
Mon, 2011-06-13 03:37
Yes
I know it is sexual just as the fountain of youth is:) I am happy for you also. Che Bello!
Eduardo Cruz
Mon, 2011-06-13 03:56
Mona
Yeah!!
I just finish talking to her, and she sent me a picture. Im in heaven. I just love being me right now at this point in my life. this is my moment!
Eddie
LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE
Eduardo Cruz
Mon, 2011-06-13 03:24
Ian
I thank you, but I think you were trying to say Puerto Rico.
Still funny.Hahaha!
Regards,
Eddie
LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE
Eduardo Cruz
Mon, 2011-06-13 18:13
Kal
your to damn much.
most of what you have said seems right, but there one thing. I have already gave it to my lady. She got the point and thought it sweetand funny
So I appreciate the correction. but right now it's lost to the wind. I will not spoil it for her with a re-write.
Please keep coming with your comments they do help for other writes I may have in mind
Thanks Kal
Eddie
LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE
Eduardo Cruz
Mon, 2011-06-13 18:14
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LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE
loved
Mon, 2011-06-13 19:07
more abt the fountain
once i read it again
tomorrow
loved