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Dry thoughts don't work well wet...

Dry thoughts don't work well wet...

Throwing your thoughts in the
tumble dryer that was never meant to be
The use of tumble dryer I mean
thoughts can go anywhere instantly

Don’t worry if you haven’t
done it the first time neither had I
one time at the very beginning
I used them not all were dry

You must put them back in
the order they exit the machine
even the ones put to the back
of your mind no matter if they're
not always clean

As I have done this many times
I’ll take you through the procedure
remember to shut the top of your head
as new thoughts will be coming through
trying to lead for sure

We could have catastrophe put it simply
disaster or even a bloody great mess
that is why you must follow the
instruction I will now try to impress

You could have the knowledge
of how to bake a cake
mixed up with a bodily function
I suppose none would care to hear no ?
we’ll leave it at this very junction

But it’s really quite scary
sometimes the way these thoughts
come about
even the ones like Jack a Cow
a bean stock leave me in doubt

Well I don’t mean to be picky disbelieving
or in anyway simple or apathetic
but no way did they have tumble dryers in Jack’s
day huh his mother couldn’t even afford electric

So if ever you have any difficulty in life perhaps
remembering what we have been told to forget
don’t let them exit the dryer to quickly
dry thoughts don’t work well wet

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My type of medtation, stare at tumble dryer and washing machine. I was working in France last year, and used the local laundrette. As i sat waiting on my clothes washing and drying, staring at the machines seemed to give me some thinking time....
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Thank you Ian i love the reply and some of the edits. Sunday coming i'll have more time to attend to editing. Regards Roscoe...

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

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" The use of tumble dryer I mean"...do you need this line?

"Don’t worry if you haven’t

done it the first time neither had I

one time at the very beginning

I used them not all were dry" ...not fond of this verse

"You must take them back in"... PUT them back in in the order. As you are using normal un-poetic language.

"of your mind no matter if their" ...they're. Do your clothes squeak?

"We could have catastrophe put it simply

disaster or even a bloody mess

that is why you must listen to the

instruction I will now try to impress" ... this bit has potential...

We could have catastrophe
put it simply, disaster
or even a bloody (great) mess
that's why you must listen
the instructions to follow
and now I will now try to impress

"But it’s really quite scary

sometimes the way these thoughts

come about
even the ones like Jack a Cow

a bean stock leave me in doubt"...hm!

Favourite line:-
"dry thoughts don’t work well wet"
They would make a good title too?

LuvAnn.

"The image of yourself which you see in a mirror Is dead,
but the reflection of the moon on water, lives." Kenzan.

Ann I love some of your ideas especially the title, I am trully greatfull for your comments and the help you have given me. Love Roscoe

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

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