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Heaven's Choir

Abounding discoveries have taken us far
with galaxies galore we’ve found billions of stars
Awareness runs riot as research admits
the older perspective now no longer fits

As science and faith both draw closer in thought
a new way of seeing’s progressively brought
With all of reality so carefully re-etched
a choir of angels seems not so far-fetched

For music vibrates in the vast emptiness
and I could but hear it - if I were just blessed
with ears to celestial notes carefully honed -
each sun softly sounding its own unique tone

If sated one hunger, I’d wish it to be
from these earthly bonds I be gently set free
to float through the cosmos on gossamer wings
and listen with joy while the universe sings


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Structured: Western
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Scientists have discovered that every star vibrates, humming its own musical note....
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so glad you liked this one
love and big hugs

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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indeed, it is now known that even the smallest particles vibrate( is this why women smile so much? LOL) sorry, could not help myself. There might be a few thing I would have done differently but change purely for the sake of change would add nothing to this insightful poem...............stan

This is one of the best western classic that I have read in a long time.
you made every line sing with each expression it was like soring in the heavens on wings of spiritual bliss.
Judy, you have touch me deep inside for i believe in the powers of the universe.

thank you for the amazing flight.
Eddie C.


I have always had problems making my writes rhyme the way I want them.. maybe it is just indicative of the fact that I need to read more and know more words in English :-)
I liked the way your stanzas were rhyming perfectly.. but there is one thing I want to tell you- To me, the words 'we've found' seem unimportant in the second line. Just my suggestion.

Cheers and happy writing
Samaira (Sam).

Keep smiling, keep shining.

I can find no fault with this perfect piece! I have no suggestions, only appreciation for the work. My favorite lines are:

As science and faith draw closer in thought,
a new way of seeing is subtly brought.
With all reality carefully re-etched,
a choir of angels seems not so far-fetched.

For music vibrates in the vast emptiness,
and I could hear it, if I were blessed
with ears to the notes carefully honed -
every sun sounding its own unique tone.

You found sculptured the perfect ending for this piece. I wish I had that kind of inner peace.Your last verse is Killer!

always, Cat

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This is so beautiful. The last 4 lines are my favorite. I could almost hear the music.

wow you must;ve dug deep to find this one
thank you so very much for the lovely compliment
and also for bringing to my attention all my frieds above who i haven't acknowledged lol hey guys, only just saw you

scribbler eef eddie samaira cat - thanks you all for the lovely comments
i am so glad you enjoyed this

lol almost tempted to do some editing to see if i can make it perfect meter now i hear it more and understand a little of the theory - i said a little...
love judy

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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