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SUICIDAL

There's no more shame
in this modern whirlwind
tomorrow forgets our stumbles
too readily, for those who choose
to ignore I'm standing.

Teetering on the edge of disaster
heart beats loud in my ear pounding
quick and even faster,

Gazing down from the brink
of the ever after, just a few hundred
feet and the agony will cease.

Turning about-face can no longer
look at the point of my demise,
from where the crushing limbs of
the sea will soon taste my bile.

I saw and became what brought
me to this dead-end rock face
Looking skywards no final words
bending knees I leap.

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Free verse
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sorry for delay in reply I am a bit sick this weekend
cheers for stopping by ,,,,,,zigs

I salute anyone who breaks the rules in the interest of art and great poetry writing just as much as I admire poets who craft meter and verse within the confines of good grammar. Walk the tight rope or jump from it and see if you can fly.

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I love the whole poem, but especially stanza 3 and 4.

Much love Louise

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

glad you stopped by glad you like it
this is not a happy theme but I needed
to post something ,,,,,,,,,,,,,cheers ,,,,,,,,,zigs

I salute anyone who breaks the rules in the interest of art and great poetry writing just as much as I admire poets who craft meter and verse within the confines of good grammar. Walk the tight rope or jump from it and see if you can fly.

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glad you stopped by glad you like it
this is not a happy theme but I needed
to post something ,,,,,,,,,,,,,cheers ,,,,,,,,,zigs

I salute anyone who breaks the rules in the interest of art and great poetry writing just as much as I admire poets who craft meter and verse within the confines of good grammar. Walk the tight rope or jump from it and see if you can fly.

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sorry to hear you have been there x
I am glad to say this is just another theme
for me, glad you stopped by I will read you
tomorrow when I am back to my self I hope
,,,,,,,,,,,,zigs x

I salute anyone who breaks the rules in the interest of art and great poetry writing just as much as I admire poets who craft meter and verse within the confines of good grammar. Walk the tight rope or jump from it and see if you can fly.

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sorry to hear you have been there x
I am glad to say this is just another theme
for me, glad you stopped by I will read you
tomorrow when I am back to my self I hope
,,,,,,,,,,,,zigs x

I salute anyone who breaks the rules in the interest of art and great poetry writing just as much as I admire poets who craft meter and verse within the confines of good grammar. Walk the tight rope or jump from it and see if you can fly.

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DON'T YOU DARE!!!

You really scared me with this one. That's how good it is! I have been there, in my years before Steve. He watched me struggle with several issues and come through it in time. I'm going to show him this poem, if you don't mind. I know he will appreciate it. The last line is stark and to the point. But my favorite lines are:

Teetering on the edge of disaster
heart beats loud in my ear pounding
quick and even faster,

Gazing down from the brink
of the ever after, just a few hundred
feet and the agony will cease.

love, Cat

When you fling poo, some of the stink sticks to you!

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from the fiirst verse! A tremendous piece of writing.

Namaste,

Lenny

_________________________________________
"Death" is nonsense: what is there to die?
"Life"? How could " life" "die"? That is a contradiction
in terms. Can "light" become "darkness"?
"Light" can only cease to be apparent

Wei Wu Wei

Wow - a look back to try and see just a small thing to allow a step back from the edge, not there. A sad piece but all to true for so many people these days. I have been lucky. I have stood on that edge but I never looked back, just up, that's where I found the beauty to try again.

A VERY powerful piece Ziggy.

Kim
(V)

Rottie
Pegasus was a genius,
living within a suit of difference.
He liked what he was,
nodded in respect and
simply flew . . . away.

By: K. Mulroney

" I am who I am, say what I say, do what I do. With no apology."

Powerful piece.just one suggestion - Put a full stop after ignore. New line "I'm standing"... Flows better and makes more impact!
I'm actually writing a blog called 'Back from the Edge' so I too have been aquainted with the night!
Nice one!
Boni

Bonitaj

I have not been here in ages
i must amend as you suggest cheers for the comment
i must look out for your blog ,cheers ,,,,,,zigs ,,,

I salute anyone who breaks the rules in the interest of art and great poetry writing just as much as I admire poets who craft meter and verse within the confines of good grammar. Walk the tight rope or jump from it and see if you can fly.

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