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Malignant Highway (Co-write with Cat)

Malignant Highway
Dark boulevard of mutilated imagination
spectres of lovers dead and buried,
haunting ancient reveries.

Heinous immortal creatures scavenge
throughout the torturous night.
Death clutches with intangible grip.

On a dank night, one soul nears madness,
roaming the darkened avenues seeking solace,
from his driving blood lust.

The squalor of the city opens it’s
filthy, bedraggled arms to swallow him,
on these streets, devoid of corporeal humanity.

Satanic creation cradles him
and clasps him to her fatal breast,
devouring all consciousness.

Naked and crying out for salvation
In the hideous half light,
of a unforgiving day.

His pleas fall upon deaf ears
Of the night and a dreamless sky
Looked down on by a dour uncaring moon
Under her pale and sickly light.

Too oft no mercy shown
To his victims alone in the dark
Now his turn to lament and cry
For clemency withholding

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Glad you liked it, it was fun to write with Cat.

Lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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I am heartened by your words of praise!

always, cat (& eddy)

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Thanks, I'm sure Cat will be pleased to.

Love Lou

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You nailed us both! LOL! Thanks always for your support!

love, Cat (& eddy)

"The Book of Styx" can be ordered and purchased on line at:
http://eddystyx.mythramuse.com/

I would not have liked to hear your campfire stories, when I was a child.
Damn ladies you two are really dark creatures, I love it!

this stanza creates a vivid picture of fear:

"Satanic creation cradles him
and clasps him to her fatal breast,
devouring all consciousness"
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THE DOOR OF MY NIGHTMARE!

"not a whisper can be heard,
for the voice is constricted
by the imagine
that is beheld by the eyes

Oh freedom wisk me away
from this creature
who has stepped out
of my horror filled nightmare's"

this is what your write provoked in my brain.

Eddie C.

LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE

Eddie, your inspiration takes my breath away!

always, Cat (& eddy)

"The Book of Styx" can be ordered and purchased on line at:
http://eddystyx.mythramuse.com/

I'm really pleased that you were so inspired. We aren't really that scarey in person lol

Lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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Thanks for the experience and thrill of writing with you! It was fun. Thanks for your patience with me.

love, Cat (& eddy)

"The Book of Styx" can be ordered and purchased on line at:
http://eddystyx.mythramuse.com/

I enjoyed writing with you a great deal, I did not need to be patient as you were very easy to write with. I look forward to writing with you again in the future, if your willing.

Much love Lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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...this one? Neither of you told me about this!!

The mind of a dark witch who feeds off the shadows with clever words dripping in blood and the soul of the woman who uses attack as her form of defense before crushing her readers with hate filled rants.

Sounds like the perfect combination for a nightmare from Hell.

I couldn't work out who wrote what, but the vivid images left me quite breathless and craving to turn the lights back on.

Can you do a fairytale next time?...I don't like being scared by two evil minds that don't understand remorse or guilt.

Fav stanza:

Satanic creation cradles him
and clasps him to her fatal breast,
devouring all consciousness.

I haven't seen thew word Satanic used for ages...it is one of those words that fills you with fright.

Blown away by the write - you did good!

HS

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Thank you .

Lou

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Wow this one I can see you both write this with much anticipation in your pens. I thought the image was dark and profound. All I can say is you did a great job together. Keep up the darkside going. Geeze will love this.

Blessings
Mona

Thank you

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