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Who? (The Other Me)
Someone waits in Timelessness
dreaming The Path for me;
guiding me through the school of manifest
and the bedrock of eternity.
Someone is Being in authentic divinity.
I’m costumed in my stardust machine.
Together we dance in our own special feature
brought through to life through our own unique dream.
Who is dreaming the dream I am walking
in the ageless I of consciousness?
Who is directing the strokes of the brush
Which, little by little, paints my eternalness?
Once re-united with self-knowledge I lack,
all experience at my fingertips to take,
I’ll hear and see what wonders, I wonder,
when both the dreamed and the dreamer awake.
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Structured: Western
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Western Australia
Favorite Poets
Favourite poets? So many, so varied. I like particular songs, not necessarily the singer... and the same goes for poetry. I can honestly say though, that Alfred Noyes' The Highwayman was what inspired my love of poetry - my mother began reading it to me when I was still a baby, and it became my favourite bedtime story
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judyanne
Mon, 2011-05-09 09:12
thanks shitly
for your wonderful insight
love and hugs
judy
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
author commentmand
Mon, 2011-05-09 10:01
Woow Judy
Profound words from a very talented deep thinker. Incredibly thought provoking.
Good to read your work again.
Love Mand xxxxxx
judyanne
Mon, 2011-05-09 11:26
thanks mand
for that awesome comment
love judy
xxxx
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
author commentNordic cloud
Mon, 2011-05-09 11:25
...dreaming in your daytime
I find I know the source of this thought-travel
into the known unknown;
and with it you intrigue the people who know not the unknown
as you do,
dreaming in your daytime
awake to write this piece of magic
to entertain our minds.
Dear judyanne so glad to see your poetry again,
love from me, annanya.
"The image of yourself which you see in a mirror Is dead,
but the reflection of the moon on water, lives." Kenzan.
judyanne
Mon, 2011-05-09 11:28
dearest annaya
thank you for that wonderful comment
so lovely to see you again too
love and hugs
judyanne
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
author commentjudyanne
Tue, 2011-05-10 06:15
rosi
i love people to get from the poem what pertains to them at their particular viewpoint of life.....
i really love that you related to this
as for my meaning - i think you sort of have it....i'm talking about my higher self and me....
love judy
xxxxx
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
author commentraj
Mon, 2011-05-09 14:21
conscience is like a
conscience is like a bedfellow
never leaves us alone for a while
each unseen act or even a thought
never escapes his might...
i enjoyed the write and the theme...
in fact i am working on a similar theme..not just ready with it as yet...
raj (sublime_ocean)
judyanne
Tue, 2011-05-10 06:19
thanks raj
for the read and great comment
love judy
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
author commentjudyanne
Tue, 2011-05-10 06:23
thanks lonnie
lol
dependent on what you mean by a flair for drama.....
i couldn't be a prima donna if i tried i'm afraid
my yin and yang is not balanced
much too much of the observer
much too little of the participant...
thanks for the great comment
love judy
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
author commentscribbler
Mon, 2011-05-09 22:00
hello
One dares not try to speed through this thought provoker...............stan
judyanne
Tue, 2011-05-10 06:24
hey stan
thank you very much
love and hugs
judy
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
author commentRace_9togo
Mon, 2011-05-09 23:56
Hi Judy,
It's good to see new writing from you.
This is very good, until the last stanza, where the cadence breaks down, for me. Particularly the 2nd line, where the cadence simply doesn't fit, imo. Up until then the flow is excellent, and the meaning and implications profound. I think you should re-work the last stanza, to fit the rest of the poem in pace and flow.
Respectfully, Race
"Laws and Rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" - Race-9togo
http://www.lulu.com/spotlight/Race_9togo
judyanne
Tue, 2011-05-10 06:27
hi jim
thanks for that
about to remove 'possible'
- i think that fixes it ??
love judy
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
author commentGeezer
Tue, 2011-05-10 07:20
Establishing...
contact with our higher selves, as you say, should be everyone's goal. Unfortunately, that is not always the case. I found this extremely interesting, and thought provoking. Nice to see a new write from you. ~ Gee
There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
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judyanne
Tue, 2011-05-10 10:53
thanks gee
for the great comment
i'll catch up with some of your stuff soon
love judy
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
author commentAyaz Warith
Tue, 2011-05-10 07:39
Dearest Judy, my favourite
Dearest Judy, my favourite lines are
Once re-united with self-knowledge I lack,
all experience at my fingertips to take,
I’ll hear and see what wonders, I wonder,
when both the dreamed and the dreamer awake.
These lines mean a lot to me...thanks a lot.
Regards
Ayaz
judyanne
Tue, 2011-05-10 10:54
thank you so very much ayaz
for the great comment
love judy
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
author commentProprietress of...
Tue, 2012-04-03 13:27
Judy...
wow, so many have commented already and I must agree, it is thought provoking and deep.
my favorite line:
I’m costumed in my stardust machine.
you have no idea how many images this evokes, this line is a true inspiration, a statement, a vision...
I simply adore the rhythm of the last two lines, the occasional staccato woven into a soft melody. beautiful and enticing.
your Proprietress
judyanne
Tue, 2012-04-03 13:42
thank you very much
you must've dug deep to find this one
thanks for looking :) it is really appreciated
and thanks for the great comments
- i especially like the line you pointed out too
love judy
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
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