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Aristocratic Articulation

An economy ruined,our currency is burning
we are at war with the world and the son of God is returning

No where else in the world does disparity meet abundance so closely
It makes me want to spit these words downs the throats
of every fucking joke that ignores me
anyone that has never given a red cent to a stranger that seemed to be in danger

In order to get into the pearly gates
you need your own personal moral code
These needy people aren't always up on the side of your high road

Feel free to lower your standards if you can manage
and drop a couple bills in the pockets of the damaged

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I must admit I don't like the chistian references.

I do like the passion and integrity.

cheers,
Jess
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I worked for the wealthy
yard boy as a teen
they rewarded hard work
task orientation

then I worked construction
harder work crazier work mates
driven bosses who got dirty
with the rest and shifted into
more lucrative positions
and business

t he rest fell away dying young from
addictions old age or hung out there
moving with the flow of where t he
money goes

Christians pulled over to give me rides
on the highway or a drink of water not
pagans Maybe if I had it beaten over
my head from significant intimate others
like family I would have a different view
but maybe not.. I studied the bible
and still believe that yes there will be a
a return

lately I'm looking to the sky to see the
wonderful alignment of planets
beautiful sight..Like comets or falling
stars...Im sure the rapture will be
beautiful to behold when it arrives..

I moved amongst those wealthier by
far then I and got a chance to see the perspectives
of a wide spectrum There are areas where
the great divergence is vast From mountaintop
to ravine I like to say

I watched the professional beggars at work
and the real genuine How the imposters
did better at times..still about the sell in the
end

I just went and read two of your poems and will
return to read more later
there is an earnestness in this voice

Thank Y ou

I just wanted to add, that this poem in no way reflects my religous views, it is simply an observation on the current state of our society.

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disheveled and hurting
but so it is
....thank You..

Your poem reminded me of the old saying about the eye of a Needle.
And an Old saying attributed to Jesus long ago, but never proven..

It is easier for a camel to go through the eye of a needle, than for a rich man to enter the kingdom of God.
The "eye of a needle" has been claimed to be a gate in Jerusalem, which opened after the main gate was closed at night.
A camel could only pass through this smaller gate if it was stooped and had its baggage removed.
This really means that you can only go through, if you are just you, and not carrying all your wealth..
This story has been put forth since at least the 15th century, and possibly as far back as the 9th century. However, there is no evidence for the existence of such a gate.
Though your religious content is unproven as most religious stuff now, the general theme of your write was good as small rants go lol,
Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

and filled with rage. I have rage. we all have rage.
You are telling us first:

An economy ruined,our currency is burning
we are at war with the world and the son of God is returning

so we are immediately see the apocalyptic stance in the poem, and by saying that about the son of God this immediately becomes a religious poem, whether you mean it to be or not.

From there you suggest each of us is responsible for the state of things in this fucked up world, and point to your charity, vaguely suggesting we don't have any.
One thing for sure, there sure are is a lot of wealth disparity to go around. Even in the rich USA, 3 people own 1/2 the wealth of the nation.

Rage is part of youth, (if I can remember those days!) It's good to get it out in a poem, but my own feeling is you should study your rage, read philosophy, and hopefully get engaged in some meaningful endeavor. We need to find answers for our rage.

Eumolpus
I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing
than teach ten thousand stars how not to dance
ee cummings

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