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THE HUNTER
Patience born of time afield
Knowlege gained by long experience
Stealth learned from endless practice
garbed in dark to hide in shadows
Little escapes his steely yes
as the hunter stalks his prey
he picks.....and chooses
at his leisure
quarry often unsuspecting
unaware of perhaps being passed over
in favor of another mark
whose end is
- sudden-
Matters not to the hunter
is prey aware of his presence
or not
same outcome
same loss
same sudden lurch between living
and dead
The slow inexorable stalk
the long stretches of silence
and waiting
and watching
and deciding
now or later?
this one or that one?
Swift cold blooded decisiveness
with inevitable result
I am the quarry Death the stalker
and eventual victor
but not today
Comments
Candlewitch
Wed, 2011-05-04 10:19
Dear Stan,
Good title. I like the presentation of this piece as it helps the flow. I was picturing a hunter with his trusty bird dog right beside him waiting for the rush of wings. I love the surprise ending!
Little escapes his steely eyes
as the hunter tracks his prey
He picks.........and chooses
at his leisure
Quarry, often unsuspecting
unaware of perhaps being passed over
in favor of another mark
whose end is
sudden
excellent writing! I have no suggestions, only appreciation for the work.
always, cat
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scribbler
Wed, 2011-05-04 13:31
hello
Thanks Cat. Now if I could only get rid of double spaced lines lol..............stan
scribbler
Wed, 2011-05-04 13:32
hi Shirl
I guess it's OK for an oldie lol.............stan
scribbler
Wed, 2011-05-04 13:33
hi Ian
Trying to remain undetected by the ultimate hunter lol...............stan
mand
Wed, 2011-05-04 14:04
Hi Stan
Well it's all been said really. I too liked the surprise and positive ending.
Great Job.
Love Mand xxxxxx
scribbler
Wed, 2011-05-04 14:06
Hi Mandy
I was just posting something from old site and hardly expected this much comment...................stan
scribbler
Thu, 2011-05-05 16:36
hello Rose
Look who got a new picture ! Thanks for the typopo catch, I rerrrley mak misstakes like that ant mower lol..............stan