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THE HUNTER

Patience born of time afield
Knowlege gained by long experience
Stealth learned from endless practice
      garbed in dark to hide in shadows

     Little escapes his steely yes
     as the hunter stalks his prey
 he picks.....and chooses
                              at his leisure
quarry often unsuspecting
      unaware of perhaps being passed over
      in favor of another mark
      whose end is
                         - sudden-

Matters not to the hunter
  is prey aware of his presence
                                       or not
                     same outcome
                 same loss
               same sudden lurch between living
                                                     
              and dead

The slow inexorable stalk
 the long stretches of silence
                                 and waiting
                                 and watching
                                 and deciding
            now    or        later?
                  this one or that one?

Swift cold blooded decisiveness
              with inevitable result

I am the quarry          Death the stalker
                                                      and eventual victor
                                                           but not today

 

                                                             

                                      

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

  

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Comments

Good title. I like the presentation of this piece as it helps the flow. I was picturing a hunter with his trusty bird dog right beside him waiting for the rush of wings. I love the surprise ending!

Little escapes his steely eyes

as the hunter tracks his prey

He picks.........and chooses

at his leisure

Quarry, often unsuspecting

unaware of perhaps being passed over

in favor of another mark

whose end is

sudden

excellent writing! I have no suggestions, only appreciation for the work.

always, cat

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Thanks Cat. Now if I could only get rid of double spaced lines lol..............stan

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I guess it's OK for an oldie lol.............stan

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Trying to remain undetected by the ultimate hunter lol...............stan

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Well it's all been said really. I too liked the surprise and positive ending.

Great Job.

Love Mand xxxxxx

I was just posting something from old site and hardly expected this much comment...................stan

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Look who got a new picture ! Thanks for the typopo catch, I rerrrley mak misstakes like that ant mower lol..............stan

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